Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: Romantic Suprise


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She turned the corner of the park and jogged down her usual path and stopped. It was her favorite part of the entire park. Every time she jogged down the path, there’s always something different

about the scenery, as if someone’d redecorated the scene just for her.

Perhaps something or someone was waiting for her…

The scene today was once again different from yesterday. The path was full of red and yellow leaves yesterday. Today, it’s all in a pile on the side of the path. Maintenance must had cleaned up the path with a leaf blower. She shrugged and kept jogging.

Traversing the curves down to a secluded river that not many people knew about, she sat down on a rock and brought her water bottle to her lips.

Snap…

She anxiously looked around and stood up, heart pounding. Quickly, she hurried up the hill back to her usual path but she bumped a tree. Something fell on her, she yelped. It was a bouquet of red roses with a note, “You come here often?”

(~175 words)

I am participating in Priceless Joy’s fairly-new flash fiction challenge, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writer, where we write a piece between 100 and 150 words (more or less 25 words) in length inspired by the photo prompt above. 

18 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: Romantic Suprise

  1. That’s a good surprise! Unless there from some creep. I can just imagine some creepy guy stepping off the trail to talk to her and her being like ” help me”

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    1. My thoughts exactly! I was left wondering “Is this good or bad?” The flowers could definitely be from a romantic stalker — maybe one she should be concerned about. And did the flowers fall from that exact tree that she accidentally bumped into or did her admirer toss them over (to land on her)? Dun, dun, dunnnnnnnnn. (Lol).

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  2. OH interesting twist. It’s almost a little creepy. I sure hope there was someone she was hoping it would be. I thought you did a good job of setting up the atmosphere, almost so much so that if you’re looking to gain some words to add other details and character background you could probably cut some of the description in the first few sections. The great thing about flash fiction is you can chop up sentences and skip minor details to focus on the build of the piece. Nice job! Now I want to know who her secret admirer is.

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