Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: This is it

wpid-photo-20150309114151945“What makes you a good potential tenant?” The apartment manager asked.

Oh, an awkward question. She nervously fiddled with her purse straps under the table.

An answer immediately popped into her mind. Inspiration. Living next to the river would give her the inspiration she needed to finish her book and then an event from last year flashed into her mind…

Joshua, her ex-boyfriend, took her to see his apartment. She was awestruck when she found out he lived next to the river.  He didn’t look like someone that could afford this place.

“Y-you live here?” She’d stammer as they entered the building.

He chuckled. “Well, I just occupy the top floor, if that’s what you mean but yeah, I do live here.”

Her eyes wandered as they waited for the elevator. Everything about this place was like an inspiration heaven, she thought. As the elevator door opened on the top floor, it opened to the crystal-blue sky and at that moment, she knew. This was it. 

(~175 words)

I am participating in Priceless Joy’s fairly-new flash fiction challenge, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writer, where we write a piece between 100 and 150 words (more or less 25 words) in length inspired by the photo prompt above.
This isn’t my best work. 

24 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: This is it

  1. What a dream apartment that would be! Sounds beautiful Yinglan. I do have a suggestion. In the 4th paragraph – third sentence. Looked should be look. I do that a lot when I am changing wording – forget to change some of the words with it.

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      1. I do that so often, I have to really be careful to proof read after I do some word changing because only to often, I forget to change all the words that need changing to fit the sentence.

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  2. I love how she is searching for inspiration and finds it in Josh’s apartment. I hope she can find a place in that building to grow that inspiration or get back together with Josh for the sake of having her dream come true. Maybe he’s not so bad?

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  3. Was Joshua her ex-boyfriend at the time he showed her his apartment, or did they break-up some time afterwards?

    Either way, the location of his apartment and the whole area were so inspirational that they’re still affecting her a year later. I hope she gets the apartment, finds inspiration in her own space, and finishes that book! Thanks for sharing a great read.

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    1. When I wrote this, I had imagined they broke up a short time after Joshua showed her the apartment because he had to go somewhere else. Long distance relationship never lasts, right? So now, his apartment’s up for rent. Thanks for reading.

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    1. Hmm… I’m not sure if she’s still friends with him. I can only say that they broke up because of a long-distance relationship. He got a job somewhere else while she didn’t want to leave.

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  4. The apartment sounds perfect for a writer: a wonderful view of the river and wide blue sky above her floor. And she found it because of a boyfriend – now her ex. At least something good came from the relationship.

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    1. No, I don’t think she wanted to get it to be closer because I imagined they broke up because her ex had moved away and the long distance just don’t work. But I think you’re right. It’s open interpretation.

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