“When the team heard the dam explode, they knew they had limited time to make it to safety. You will never guess what happened next.”
“What?” Susan asked impatiently.
“You know how the twins are always fighting? They literally fought harder. They were arguing about where to stick the damn paddle in the water. It wasn’t the kind of thing to argue about when you’re trying to turn around. With the current was so strong, I could literally feel the raft tilting in the back. John looked like he was about to go overboard. Jeff screamed. ‘Dude, what’s your problem? Are you trying to kill us all?’
Jeff snarled back, ‘Can’t you see I’m trying? Do you know how hard this is?’
I was sick of their arguing. They’re brothers, you know. So I told Abel to give me his paddle, I turn my body around and began paddling the other way, full force. If it was up to the twins, we could’ve flipped.”
James heard a snore. He sighed. “It happens every time.”
Each week, Mondays Finish the Story challenges our minds by providing with a picture along with the first sentence for us to finish the flash fiction with 100 -150 words based on the picture above.
Yinglan – This was great! I wanted to make a correction if you do not mind. Pedal and pedaling should be paddle and paddling. Thank you for again taking part in the MFtS challenge and I hope that you return next week! Be well…. ^,,^
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Thank you for pointing it out. Sometimes, I get confused by same sounding words. I’ve went back to correct it. See you next week.
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🙂 It happens to us all! I am glad that you will be returning next week! I truly enjoy your stories! ^..^
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Thanks.
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Very good Yinglan! I have a question. Where did James come from? That part I didn’t understand. Good job on the rest!
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I liked your story. Interesting take on the picture. Much more uplifting than mine. If I am correct, James was on the boat and was telling Susan, his wife, the story after the event. 🙂
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Thank you.
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I think I figured out who James is. He’s the one telling the story. LOL! I missed it before because I wasn’t paying attention to the title. Sorry.
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Yes, James is the guy at the very back of the raft and also the narrator as well as the “self-proclaimed” hero of the story. 😀
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Really clever take on the prompt Yinglan, well done 🙂
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Thank you.
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Thats interesting take.. and the snoring at the end .. was good 🙂 loved it.
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Thank you! 🙂
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Interesting take on the prompt, Yinglan. I too like the snoring at the end! 🙂
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Thank you. 🙂
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Nice little story, Yinglan, with a very amusing last line. 🙂
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Thanks. 🙂
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I did not expect that at the end!
Poor James, he told an interesting story.
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I was a bit confused. Was the story being told to someone. I was also confused by the the number of characters. It was well written but confusing in some ways, Yinglan. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Yes, the story was being told to Susan by James, the guy at the back of the raft. He’s the narrator in this story. The number of characters is the number of people you see on the raft plus James’s wife, Susan. I hope it clears up a bit, Suzanne. 🙂
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