Monday’s Finish the Story: Bedtime Story

2015-03-23-bw-beacham1“When the team heard the dam explode, they knew they had limited time to make it to safety. You will never guess what happened next.”

“What?” Susan asked impatiently.

“You know how the twins are always fighting? They literally fought harder. They were arguing about where to stick the damn paddle in the water. It wasn’t the kind of thing to argue about when you’re trying to turn around. With the current was so strong, I could literally feel the raft tilting in the back. John looked like he was about to go overboard. Jeff screamed. ‘Dude, what’s your problem? Are you trying to kill us all?’

Jeff snarled back, ‘Can’t you see I’m trying? Do you know how hard this is?’

I was sick of their arguing. They’re brothers, you know. So I told Abel to give me his paddle, I turn my body around and began paddling the other way, full force. If it was up to the twins, we could’ve flipped.”

James heard a snore. He sighed. “It happens every time.”

Each week, Mondays Finish the Story challenges our minds by providing with a picture along with the first sentence for us to finish the flash fiction with 100 -150 words based on the picture above.  


20 thoughts on “Monday’s Finish the Story: Bedtime Story

  1. Yinglan – This was great! I wanted to make a correction if you do not mind. Pedal and pedaling should be paddle and paddling. Thank you for again taking part in the MFtS challenge and I hope that you return next week! Be well…. ^,,^

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    • Yes, the story was being told to Susan by James, the guy at the back of the raft. He’s the narrator in this story. The number of characters is the number of people you see on the raft plus James’s wife, Susan. I hope it clears up a bit, Suzanne. 🙂


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