Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: Stranded

wpid-photo-20150410164052503“Land ho!” Aaron cried excitedly, startling Phillip, who’s half-asleep at the back of their dingy.

Phillip groaned and lifted his straw hat from his face. “Dude, what are you? A pirate?”

Aaron pointed at the island and looked at Phillip. “Tell me you’re not glad.”

Phillip pretended to think. “Okay, I’m not glad.”

“What?” Aaron shrieked.

“Dude, we’ve been drifting in this damn thing for five days. We have no food and now we’re landing on some remote island in the middle of the ocean. So tell me why I should be glad.”

“Man, just look at it. This island’s got to have everything we need.” He said optimistically and handed Phillip an oar. “Come on, let’s get to shore.”

Phillip saluted, “Aye, Captain Brightside,” and began paddling.

On their second day on the island, as they settled themselves on a log, several squirrels skewered on the spit before them, they heard a rustle behind them. Aaron jumped. “What’s that?”

“It’s probably nothing.” Phillip muttered as he felt a sharp pain shooting up his every nerve and cutting off his breath.

(~175 words)

I am participating in Priceless Joy’s flash fiction challenge, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writer, where we write a piece between 100 and 150 words (more or less 25 words) in length inspired by the photo prompt above. 

32 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: Stranded

    1. I’m afraid I have to, it’s all part of the fun of writing flash fiction, to leave readers stranded. If it’s any consolation, you can think of an ending and write it.


  1. Aw, I guess being optimistic doesn’t always pay off :D. At first I thought, maybe he’s been attacked by a lion, but then I saw your reply to priceless Joy and i realized, that made more sense :D. Very well written.

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  2. Great show of how desperately wanting something to work out — and — it actually working out aren’t the same thing. I feel for both of your characters and their worsening predicament (or so it seems). There’s still hope yet! Kind of (lol).

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