Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: Punishment for Defiance


wpid-photo-20150502133854871Sharise and her sister Sasha looked out to the vast ocean. “Where are you taking us?” Sharise inquired the man rowing the boat.

“Do not question him.” Her mother snapped. Sharise shrank. They have been sitting in this shallow rowboat for the past hour and as far as anyone could tell, they were venturing further from land.

“Mother, can’t you see land is no longer in our sights?” Sasha pleaded as her mother shot her an icy glare.

Their mother stared straight ahead, her hands folded at her lap as they journeyed. “This is far enough,” she muttered

At her words, the man stopped rowing. Willingly, he let the oar slipped between his hands into the water. “What are you doing?” Sharise asked. The man said nothing as he stood and fell into the water. “Mother, what’s going on?”

“Punishment, for your defiance. This shall teach you girls to do as you’re told. Now it is your responsibilities to make your way back.” She grinned and with one wave of her hand, she vanished into thin air.

(~175 Words)

I am participating in Priceless Joy’s flash fiction challenge, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writer, where we write a piece between 100 and 150 words (more or less 25 words) in length inspired by the photo prompt above. 

21 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: Punishment for Defiance

  1. Excellent buildup of suspense! I’m intrigued to know if the sisters knew their mother could teleport or astral project — what the sisters did that was worthy of such punishment — and if, or why, the man who was on rowing duty sacrified his life (maybe he was being controlled). So many elements. Again, excellent take on the prompt!

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    • Thank you!
      Actually, the girls’ mother is a witch and witches tend to have to power to control people. Their mother is a good kind of witches. The girls, on the other hand, are clueless. They are just being disobedient. Guess it was the last straw if their mother have to resort to that as their punishment. Thanks again for reading.

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  2. Wow, this was great. Loved how their mum disappeared into thin air. Wonder if the girls will find their way back to shore? Just a suggestion- put a comma after what is being said before the closing quotation mark. For example – “This is far enough,” she muttered.

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