Continue from last week’s story…
The crew of the Angel Flame received orders to head out. Captain John Humphrey saluted Jesse Benjamin. “You are to find this kid, no matter what it takes.” General Benjamin ordered.
“Sir yes sir!”
Two days later…
“Sir,” Private Scott Jameson reported, “the scope has discovered something metallic.”
“Reel it in.”
“Sir yes sir.”
It was part of a rocket. If the rocket is here, then where is the ship? “Keep searching for the ship.” Captain Humphrey ordered. “The kid has got to be here somewhere.” He mumbled as he headed back to his office. This Amari fellow must be desperate to search his kid like this but if he wanted the kid so much, then why did he abandon him in the first place?
Two more days later…
The crew still hadn’t found anything. Perhaps the ship landed elsewhere, Captain Humphrey thought. Feeling resigned, he opened the latch, climb out of the submarine, and stared at the vast ocean.
(150 words)
Each week, Mondays Finish the Story challenges our minds by providing with a picture along with the first sentence for us to finish the flash fiction with 100 -150 words based on the picture above.
Nicely done Yinglan! I like that this is a continuation of last weeks bit of flash…I do want to know what happens next, which is a sign of a great story. Be well my friend… ^..^
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Thank you. I am glad I get to continue the story this week. Thanks for the inspiring picture and opening line. 🙂
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You are welcome!
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A mystery! Where could the kid be? I hope they find him.
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No idea but I don’t think they will find him. They are looking in the wrong place. 🙂
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The captain’s frustration was so evident in that last scene! Nicely done!
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Thank you.
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Great story Yinglan!
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Thank you. 🙂
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Excellent story!!
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Thank you. 🙂
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Is there a sequel to this?
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Yes, there is and you can read it right here:
https://yzhengblog.wordpress.com/2015/01/12/mondays-finish-the-story-the-lone-survivor/
What I am writing now is the prequel to this story and currently, I am trying to make the two collide to turn it into one big story instead of a prequel and sequel.
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Nice building of tension and good description, Yinglan. I’ll be reading next week’s installment. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thank you.
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