Continued from last week’s story…
Her grandmother walked to the table in the corner. On which was a large wooden bowl of what looked like ashes with incense sticking up. Her grandmother picked a fresh incense from the jar beside the bowl and placed it between her palms. She stared at it as Sharise watched with excitement. Within seconds, the tip of the incense glowed red.
Slowly, her grandmother bowed eight times, Sharise counted, before gently sticking the incense into the bowl. “Who are they?” Sharise asked a short while later. She was looking at the picture pinned on the wall. It was a picture of eight boys, all looked similar as if they were related.
“Your brothers,” Her grandmother answered.
“My what?” Sharise shrieked. Clearly, she didn’t know about her other siblings.
Her grandmother sighed. “Your mother has a nasty habit of sacrificing her children for their powers. That was what she was doing to you and Sasha.” Her grandmother led her to the mats in the center of the room. “Come, sit, and let me tell you a story.”
In case you don’t get the real picture
(~175 Words)
To be Continued…
I am participating in Priceless Joy’s flash fiction challenge, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writer, where we write a piece between 100 and 150 words (more or less 25 words) in length inspired by the photo prompt above.
In case you’ve missed the previous parts of this serial tale, you can read it by clicking each of the links below:
Part 1: Punishment for Defiance
Part 2: From Ocean to Park
Part 3: Gazebo Surprise
Part 4: Discovery
Hmmm I see a pattern here
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Ohh that’s interesting…
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Thank you.
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Excellent story! I’m happy that this works well as a stand alone too. She sure got a shock! She must have a witch as a mother.
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Thank you, I tried to make it stand alone so people wouldn’t have to read all the parts to catch up, only if they’re curious.
Yeah, it’s sure a shock to find out she has eight other siblings she doesn’t know about. We must learn more about the mother but from this point, I’d say it looks like the mother is the villain in this story. Thank you for reading. 🙂
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I can’t wait to read the next episode!
You did nice job by adding fear and mystery here 🙂
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Thank you. I am looking forward to write the next episode. 🙂
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PJ is right as it works well as stand-alone too!
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I try to make it this way so it wouldn’t be too confusing.
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Nice eerie story! Lol, your mothers are always doing things to their kids ❤ Nice story! Now I'll go back and read the previous part of the story!
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Thanks, well, that’s what mothers do, isn’t it?
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Probably true 😀
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😀
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I like the way you have moved the story along this week. For Sharise to be told about her mother’s true nature would have come as a huge shock. I liked the way you made use of the prompt, too. To have the boys as her brothers was a great idea.
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Thank you. To be honest, I was having a little trouble coming up with the continuation this week because I thought what can I do with eight boys and it hit me. Why not make them her brothers? The boys looked similar enough to be. 🙂 I’m looking forward to write about the mother’s story next week. Thank you for reading.
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Yes, I’d really like to know what makes this mother tick. I’ll look forward to the next episode.
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An interesting revelation which would probably shock anyone!
I am looking forward to the next instalment.
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Thank you.
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What a truth to learn about your mother! A great continuation, Yinglan, with an interesting link to this week’s prompt. 🙂
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Thank you.
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Wow. Nice take on the prompt. 🙂
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Thank you.
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intriguing! Looking forward to the next part.
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Thank you, looking forward to writing the next part. 🙂
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I like how you do a continuation of the story but it can stand alone as well. Well done.:)
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Thank you. 🙂
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Wow! Such a shock for her to find out they are her brothers. Great idea for use of the photo prompt. I’m looking forward to part 5.
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Thank you. 🙂
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omg! what a fantastic continuation from last week. I love this one especially…to see the evil and the goodness even more unfolding. I agree with others – this could stand alone but…the whole series is coming together so nicely. I can see these pieces as a loose collection of somewhat connected fiction.
The grandmother seems just fabulously magical to me. You’ve done a good job with her character.
Ellespeth
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Thank you so much. 🙂
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I wanted to stop by and just let you know how much I appreciate you for continuing to participate in this challenge. I love reading your stories and I know that others do too. You have become such a wonderful fiction writer! Thank you Yinglan! I appreciate your friendship and loyalty.
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🙂 I’ve been enjoying it.
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Oh boy! To find out that your mother is a witch. You are really bringing out the eerie in this. Great job!
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Thank you. 🙂
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