“What a tangled web we weave, when first we practice to deceive.” That’s what mama said before she left us at the park that day. I remember my sister feeling confused, pleading for an explanation. I was seven and she was four.
After spending the last fourteen years being shuttled from one foster home to another, from city to town, town to country-side, and even spending a year in a disgusting attic with spider web covering every inch top to bottom before we scrubbed it clean ourselves, I still have no idea what mama’s last words meant.
I now live in the city, just a block from the park where we were abandoned. I have a low-paying job and today, I am walking my sister to the bus station where she will go off to college, something I never had the chance to do. I guess part of me was scared while another part of me was still hoping mama would show.
(150 words)
Each week, Mondays Finish the Story challenges our minds by providing with a picture along with the first sentence for us to finish the flash fiction with 100 -150 words based on the picture above.
I am having a very strange kind of writer’s block this week and it’s creating difficulty for me to write flash fictions. I hope this story makes sense, grammatically and logically. It’s all just a big ramble off the top of my head.
I think this makes perfect sense. So sad that one sister sacrificed for the other because of their mother’s tangled web.
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Thanks, I’m glad it makes sense and it’s sad that the narrator had to be the mother figure for her sister at such a young age.
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Sad but happy that one sister gets to go to college
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Yes, I suppose at least one sister deserves a happy ending.
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It’s a sad tale. But the hope of one succeeding makes for better end
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It’s better than a sad ending.
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I think the tangled web is completely in contradiction with “a simple life”. “Tangled Webs” are complicacies that we may never understand. A tangled web is usually associated with conspiracies. 🙂
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Exactly and frankly, I had no idea what that opening line meant and I was too lazy to look it up. So I’d just decided to wing it. Thank you for reading. 🙂
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No worries there… It was still a good story! 🙂
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Thank you. 🙂
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Poor girls.. Still am happy for younger sister to find her path to achieve her dreams, thanks to the elder one, who must have sacrificed a lot
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Yeah, I am happy too, to have chosen the better ending. 🙂
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A sad story. But they were lucky to be together all the years after the mother abandoning them. Well done Yinglan! Thanks for sticking with the MFtS challenge and be well… ^..^
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Thank you. It was a pleasure to participate and I’m looking forward to next week. 🙂
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😀
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Even after all that, she was willing to take her mother back. Lucky mama. Someday I hope she learns that she was forgiven for what she did to them — if she’s still alive. Lovely, but very sad story! Well done.
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Thank you, and yes that is one lucky woman but I think mostly she just want to find her mother to learn the truth and maybe not as to forgive her.
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Aha! I stand corrected! In that case I still hope she finds mama so she can tell her what she did to them!
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Yeah and tell her how she had ruined them.
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I really liked the way you wrote it rambling. I can hear a drawl in her voice and it’s one of the fastest life stories I’ve ever heard (read) 🙂
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Thank you. 🙂
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Beautiful story that was bitter-sweet. You did an excellent job writing this! I have a question. In order to geet the blue froggy button on your story, what do you have to do? I had someone ask and I only know how to get it for the challenge.
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Thank you so much. .
To get blue froggy button, it’s easy. Rochelle from Friday Fictioneers provides the link to get the code. Then for the other challenges, just change the URL for the linkup in the text editor.
For example: this is the code for this week’s FF
<!– start InLinkz script –>
<a href=”http://new.inlinkz.com/view.php?id=530932″ rel=”nofollow”><img style=”border: 0;” src=”http://www.inlinkz.com/img/wp/wpImg.png” alt=”” /></a>
<!– end InLinkz script –>
For the other challenges, I just copy and paste the inlinkz URL into that spot.
For instance, the code for this challenge:
<!– start InLinkz script –>
<a href=”http://new.inlinkz.com/view.php?id=531045″ rel=”nofollow”><img style=”border: 0;” src=”http://www.inlinkz.com/img/wp/wpImg.png” alt=”” /></a>
<!– end InLinkz script –>
I hope it makes sense and not too confusing.
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Thank you so much! I think I understand what you are doing in order to get it.
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🙂 I’m glad.
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Good story. I felt the sadness and resignation of the older sister. 🙂
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Thank you.
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Such a sad story… a mother’s entanglements force one child to be mother and the other to reach her dreams.. but I enjoyed it!
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Thanks. 🙂
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You’re welcome 🙂
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