Monday’s Finish the Story: The Message

2015-06-15-bw-beachamContinued from this story

At first, it looked like an ordinary marble, but it was far from it. Johan didn’t know how but he recognized it immediately. He looked around and realized he was no longer in the warehouse. He picked it up and lightly pressed his fingers against the surface. The ball glowed blue instantly as a familiar man appeared before him. “Johan,” the man smiled and all of a sudden, words formed at Johan’s lips, “dad,” he gasped.

“Son, you’ve grown so much.”

“What. Is. Happening?” Johan asked slowly.

“You must’d activated your speech. Don’t worry, you will be home soon.” Amari disappeared leaving Johan alone in the barren red-soiled landscape. What did he mean? Johan wondered and looked down at the ball, no longer glowing but hairline fractures started to run along the perimeter of the ball. Frightened, he dropped it.

As he looked up again, his landscape changed again. He was back in the warehouse and a gun was an inch from his forehead. “Time to go, Alien.” Captain Benjamin smirked.

(157 words)

Each week, Mondays Finish the Story challenges our minds by providing with a picture along with the first sentence for us to finish the flash fiction with 100 -150 words based on the picture above. 

Read the chain of events that led to this:

  1. The Lone Survivor
  2. Abandoned
  3. The Stake Out
  4. The Fugitive
  5. Panicked
  6. Mmm, Pizza
  7. A Cursed Child
  8. Heartbroken
  9. The Search
  10. Trouble
  11. Chained and Shackled


22 thoughts on “Monday’s Finish the Story: The Message

    1. Thank you. This week’s prompt threw me off my storyline just a little bit. Johan has always been an alien. That bit with the messenger ball was taken place in his head. I’m not sure. I’m still trying to work out this story. Anyway, I’m compiling all the parts and weaving it into a bigger story (without parts) that actually make sense and if I do it right, it should become a million times clearer.

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      1. That will be great Yinglan! Your writing has gotten to good! That is one thing I like about flash fiction. It helps us improve our writing skills. Not sure mine is, but everyone else’s is!

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  1. Very well written intrigue in this story! I love the way the marble brought forth his father, and then cracks and he’s transported to the end of a gun. Lots of cool action!

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