Continued from this story…
At first, it looked like an ordinary marble, but it was far from it. Johan didn’t know how but he recognized it immediately. He looked around and realized he was no longer in the warehouse. He picked it up and lightly pressed his fingers against the surface. The ball glowed blue instantly as a familiar man appeared before him. “Johan,” the man smiled and all of a sudden, words formed at Johan’s lips, “dad,” he gasped.
“Son, you’ve grown so much.”
“What. Is. Happening?” Johan asked slowly.
“You must’d activated your speech. Don’t worry, you will be home soon.” Amari disappeared leaving Johan alone in the barren red-soiled landscape. What did he mean? Johan wondered and looked down at the ball, no longer glowing but hairline fractures started to run along the perimeter of the ball. Frightened, he dropped it.
As he looked up again, his landscape changed again. He was back in the warehouse and a gun was an inch from his forehead. “Time to go, Alien.” Captain Benjamin smirked.
(157 words)
Each week, Mondays Finish the Story challenges our minds by providing with a picture along with the first sentence for us to finish the flash fiction with 100 -150 words based on the picture above.
Read the chain of events that led to this:
- The Lone Survivor
- Abandoned
- The Stake Out
- The Fugitive
- Panicked
- Mmm, Pizza
- A Cursed Child
- Heartbroken
- The Search
- Trouble
- Chained and Shackled
Excellent! And suspenseful! What happens next? Thanks again Yinglan for writing for the MFtS challenge. See you next week, and be well… ^..^
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Thank you for hosting this delightful challenge and reading and commenting. I’m looking forward to writing next week’s story. See you then. 🙂
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🙂
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There’s some hope of escape if his dad is to be believed. Can’t wait to see what happens next!
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Maybe he will activate some other skills which can turn the tide, we’ll see. Thank you for reading.
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Nice, a cliffhanger! Great story!
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Thank you.
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Great story Yinglan! I want to know why he is now considered an Alien. He wasn’t before he touched the marble was he?
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Thank you. This week’s prompt threw me off my storyline just a little bit. Johan has always been an alien. That bit with the messenger ball was taken place in his head. I’m not sure. I’m still trying to work out this story. Anyway, I’m compiling all the parts and weaving it into a bigger story (without parts) that actually make sense and if I do it right, it should become a million times clearer.
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That will be great Yinglan! Your writing has gotten to good! That is one thing I like about flash fiction. It helps us improve our writing skills. Not sure mine is, but everyone else’s is!
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Thank you. I’m actually doing the same thing for FFfAW. It the same story except it’s much more detailed since my word limit is infinite. 🙂
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I like the addition of Johan’s father and the message – it adds an interesting new dimension to the plot. Great continuation. 🙂
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Thank you. I’m actually trying to bring everything together and wrap up this story but I think it’s still got a little bit more to go. Thank you for reading. 🙂
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Wonderful work Yinglan a super continuation of your story ~ 🙂
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Thank you.
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Very intriguing and clever how you wove the prompt into the plot.
Great continuation!
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Thank you. It’s getting kind of tough now that I’m nearing the end. So it took me a while this week to come up with the story.
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Very well written intrigue in this story! I love the way the marble brought forth his father, and then cracks and he’s transported to the end of a gun. Lots of cool action!
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Thank you. And there will a lot more once I put this whole thing together. 🙂
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I’d LOVE to read the final product!
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Very interesting- love how you tied it all back together at the end!
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Thank you.
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