Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: A Visitor

Published on by Yinglan

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No one knew he’s lived here for years, working discreetly at the convenience store around the corner while living life on a bare minimum. His only mode of transportation was an old bicycle which he stole years before. He had no family, no friends, no one. He called his life a simple life.

However, one morning, just as he was getting up, someone banged on his door. He froze. Quickly, he crossed the room and peeked out the front window. When he saw no police cars, he sighed a breath of relief and opened the door. A woman, probably in her mid-20’s, stood on the other side of the door. “May I help you?” He asked.

“Excuse me but by chance, is your name David Lite?”

He stared suspiciously before answering, “Yes, and you are?”

Instead of answering, her eyes grew teary. She pursed her lips while bobbing her head up and down. “I’ve been searching for you for a long time, David.” He stared with oblivion. “It’s me Carla, your sister.”

(~172 Words)

I am participating in Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writer, where we write a piece between 100 and 150 words (more or less 25 words) in length inspired by the photo prompt above.

30 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: A Visitor”

  6. I interpreted this a little differently, seeing it as more mystery/thriller rather than a happy reunion. He’s clearly been hiding from the law a while, and apparently from his family as well. He and his sister didn’t even recognize each other. This sounds like the beginning of a complicated and possibly quite tragic plot about to unfold!

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  10. This a great story! There are so many possible scenarios to this story. I was thinking that he would be happy to see his sister. Maybe he did something that caused him to leave and he never felt like he deserved forgiveness , so he just stayed to himself. I tend to lean toward the happier side of life if possible. Hopefully, he and his sister will get to know each other again, and things will build from that.

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