Friday Fictioneers: Five Minutes

Published on by Yinglan

PHOTO PROMPT – © Emmy L Gant
PHOTO PROMPT – © Emmy L Gant

I remember the day perfectly. We were supposed to meet on the roof though I wasn’t sure I wanted to go out that day given the grey skies. I hate the rain and it’s been raining all week but he insisted. There was traffic all through downtown and that resulted in my being five minutes late. I raced up four flights to the roof but as I pushed the heavy metal door open, I heard a loud bang. My chest started racing as I watched him fall. “No!” I screamed and he might had lived if I’ve been on time.

(100 words)

Each week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields-Addicted to Purple hosts Friday Fictioneers where we’re challenged to write a piece of flash fiction in 100 words, more or less, based on the picture above.

27 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: Five Minutes”

  1. Great story! You grabbed the reader instantly and set up a mystery, with such a sad twist at the end.

    I would only suggest a couple of minor grammar or tense changes:

    Instead of “resulted TO my being five minutes late,” say “resulted IN my being five minutes late.” That would be the more accepted syntax.

    Also, “watched him fell” should be “watched him fall.”

    Hope that helps!

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