Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: Salvation


He’s been trudging through the forest for hours. His clothes were torn and his face and bare-feet were caked with mud. Ever since the long gash on his right arm stopped bleeding, it had turned black, making him feel light-headed and weak. “You’ll be okay.” He told himself sternly and leaned against a tree. “You can survive this.” He muttered and continued walking.

He’s now an American stranded in a foreign country with no ID, money, and passport. He swallowed at the thought. “We’ll find a way home. We always do.” He muttered as he stumbled among the trees until his strength gave in and he fell against a tree. Some time later, he strenuously opened his eyes again and looked up. It was a giant windmill and not far from it was a large white house. He laughed and began crying at the same time and then he muttered to the sky, “Thank you.”

(~155 words)

I am participating in Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writer, where we write a piece between 100 and 150 words (more or less 25 words) in length inspired by the photo prompt above. 

14 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: Salvation

  1. interesting approach. You leave plenty to our imagination… which is good. I will spend a while wondering what happened to put him in that situation to begin with. But you did an excellent job picking up the story right at a critical point and bringing us… not to the ending… but to the point of hope… and thanks. Well done my friend…


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  2. Love the emotion in this piece. You can tell he wants to live so much, he’s desperate to survive. Thank goodness he came upon this windmill and house! This reminds me of something I read. People who are stuck in the desert for days and are so thirsty they are dying will suddenly cry when someone finds them, saves them. They needed water in them so badly, yet they had enough Iiquid in their body for tears. I sense the same feeling in this man. Well written.

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    • I know that feeling too. I’ve read it in books and seen it on TV shows. It is strange how there’s enough liquid in the body to produce tears while it’s dehydrated. Thank you for reading. 🙂

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