Blinds shut, broken window boarded up, and half-dozen lit candles on the kitchen counter, he walked to the corner. “Hungry?” He asked in clipped tone.
Wrapping her arms tight around her daughter, she whimpered, “W-why are you doing this?”
He lowered to her eye-level, “I want us to be together.” He took their daughter from her grip, “Come on, let’s eat.” He said and with his free hand, he dragged her to the dining room where more lit candles surrounded the five Chinese takeout containers on the table.
“Please, j-just let us go.” She begged.
“Eat.” He shoved a container toward her and forced her on the chair. Outside, an engine roared, he set their daughter on the chair and turned to the front door. That was her queue. With all her strength, she threw the chair at him, knocking him to the ground. “Ouch! Get back here!”
With her daughter in her arm, she twisted the doorknob and ran onto the street, a SUV nearly slammed into her. “Help!” She cried at the driver.
(~175 words)
I am participating in Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writer, where we write a piece between 100 and 150 words (more or less 25 words) in length inspired by the photo prompt above.
I enjoy reading your flash fiction posts…you write so well!
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Thanks. 🙂
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Very tense scene until the “Ouch”. Something stronger is needed I think. Nice piece.
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Thanks but he’s not that kind of a man and I think he lost it there a little bit when she threw that chair. So I put the “ouch” in there to show he broke his mean scary pretense.
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Ahh I see. I thought he was a truly scary individual.
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Haha, nah, he’s just a pretender.
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I hope the lady gets the help and escapes in the SUV..!
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I’m sure she will get all the help she needs. Thank you for reading. 🙂
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Good one, a great bit of dramatic action writing.
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Thank you. 🙂
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Glad she got herself and her daughter away from that sicko! Great tension build up Yinglan and a great story!
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Thank you. I wrote the story backwards so I wouldn’t have to bear the excitement. 😀
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Hahaha! Really??
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Yup! 🙂
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I’m wondering if she managed to escape. Did the Suv driver helped/ignored her? And why did she wanted to go? hmmm very nice Yinglan, I wish it could continue.
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Well, he was keeping her against her will and it’s obvious she didn’t want him to have her daughter even though it’s his daughter too. Interesting interpretation. I guess the ending can go both ways. Thank you for reading. 🙂
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Oh I fear they might not make it.
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I’m sure they will. 🙂
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Wow seems Dad went a little crazy. Glad they escaped!
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It seems like she fell in love with the wrong guy. I’m glad she escaped too.
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I hope that they were rescued.
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I hope they were too. 🙂
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