PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Carroll
Racing across the warehouse, he found her lying in a pool of blood, gasping for breath. Not far from her lay her half-brother, his eyes wide-open and still. “I’m sorry, I shouldn’t had left you alone.” He apologized, holding her in his arms.
“I-i-it’s okay,” she stuttered and smiled. “You couldn’t have known.”
“Just let me gather some stuff and you’ll be alright again in no time.”
“No, there’s no saving me. That knife,” her eyes trailed to the knife five steps away, “is full of snake venom. I love you.” She spoke her last words and closed her eyes.
(100 words)
Each week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields-Addicted to Purple hosts Friday Fictioneers where we’re challenged to write a piece of flash fiction in 100 words, more or less, based on the picture above.
Good but for the sake of pendantry, surely a knife would be covered in venom, but when dying I guess grammar isn’t high on your list.
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I think she’s trying to be quick, to say all she can in the short time remaining. So no, grammar isn’t a priority.
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“Rafferty was dying. It’s difficult to be neat in those circumstances.”
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I agree.
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I just remembered that line, pity I had to cut it.
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😄😄😄
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Today is Thursday unless you live on the other side of the dateline. 🙂
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It’s just the name of the challenge. It doesn’t mean one has to post on a Friday. In fact, the challenge runs from Wednesday to the following Wednesday.
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Oh, the horror! Good grief. this is going to give me nightmares 🙂
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Outstanding writing. Gary
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Thank you.
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What a tragic last scene. Well told, but I missed the rest of the play. 🙄
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Thank you. Good point though I believe the rest of the play will be boring. The last bit is always the most exciting. 😀
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What an intriguing tale. Snakes, knives…excellent.
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Thank you. 🙂
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Great story! Very intriguing!
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Thank you. ☺
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the venom was kind of an overkill. somebody must want her dead real bad.
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Yeah, no doubt about that.
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Awesome take on the photo prompt
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Great take on the prompt
Cheers
MeenalSonal from AuraOfThoughts
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Thank you.
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Well written, but sad. Darn snakes!
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Thank you. Yeah, darn snakes. 🙂
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