“Stop following me!” Her scream rang through the hotel corridor. He grabbed her arm but she yanked it away. “Can’t you see I don’t love you anymore? Move on already.”
“I can’t,” he spoke in a hushed tone, looking around. “I can’t move on, not when I still have feeling for you.” He took a step back and sighed. “You know what, meet me by the lamppost in the square at midnight. If you don’t show up, then I will move on, no matter how painful it is.”
That night, she stood by the lamppost and waited. He never showed.
(100 words)
Each week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields-Addicted to Purple hosts Friday Fictioneers where we’re challenged to write a piece of flash fiction in 100 words, more or less, based on the picture above.
Wow! What a jerk that guy is!
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I know!
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Worth a try I suppose! Oh well!
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Oh, no! I wasn’t expecting him to stand her up. I suppose it was revenge. Thanks for surprising me.
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It’s kind of like that. 🙂
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That was a punch in the stomach. I wonder if he was just trying to make her understand how she might have hurt him, if he was a jerk, or if something horrible happened. Nicely done.
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I’m not sure. There are so many possibilities to this story but based on the way he expressed himself, I’d say something terrible has happened to him.
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Woah, that jerk!
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I know, right?
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Great story. You packed a lot of character depth in there.
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Thank you. ☺
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Your writing is lucid. You have chosen your verbs and adjectives very carefully so that the characters’ feelings and motivations seem clear. And what questions you leave us with! Was he wanting to be the dumper rather than the dumped? Has something terrible happened to him? Was she under the right lamppost? Even more intriguingly, why was she there at all? She’d told him to get lost in no uncertain terms.
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Thank you. I think something terrible has happened to him but it all depends on your imagination, I guess, since I’ve left the ending pretty much open-ended.
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I’m sure something must have happened to him, didn’t seem like a guy who would abandon a girl whom he loved so dearly.
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That’s what I was thinking too when I was writing this story.
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I don’t think he would deliberately humiliate her–he obviously cared for her. What puzzles me is why she decided to show up. Makes me wonder about their history around that lamp post .
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Maybe what she said was a lie. Maybe deep down, she still has feeling for him.
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That was unexpected!
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what he did that for? obviously, he’s not a keeper.
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I hope that he keep that other promise at least.
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I hope so too.
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